FeedBack on my idea of making a walktrough

[TheWickedOnes]

Hey Freedom!

I'm kinda new to youtube and would like some feedback from other youtubers,
What do you guys and gurls think about:

-The commentary given?
I'm Dutch and sometimes I find this very hard to give.
During a cutscene I try to keep quiet, to give the viewer have the same experience as i have.
Also I'm using a Blue Yeti mic and garageband(Mac)

-The Tumbnail?
Basically the eye catcher, is it good enough?

-The Quality of the Video itself?
I'm using an Elgato 60 and Final Cut Pro X

-The Setup?
Think of the description and how I start and end the video.

Sample:

This is my latest video (Made by me Lars), I would really appreciate it if you leave your thoughts below.
Also if you really feel like it you could check out my first video ("Star wars Battlefront gameplay part 1") and see if i grew in the points above.

Anyway thanks in advanced!

Lars from the wicked Ones

 

[Angry Panda Gaming]

Hey Freedom!

I'm kinda new to youtube and would like some feedback from other youtubers,
What do you guys and gurls think about:

-The commentary given?
I'm Dutch and sometimes I find this very hard to give.
During a cutscene I try to keep quiet, to give the viewer have the same experience as i have.
Also I'm using a Blue Yeti mic and garageband(Mac)

-The Tumbnail?
Basically the eye catcher, is it good enough?

-The Quality of the Video itself?
I'm using an Elgato 60 and Final Cut Pro X

-The Setup?
Think of the description and how I start and end the video.

Sample:

This is my latest video (Made by me Lars), I would really appreciate it if you leave your thoughts below.
Also if you really feel like it you could check out my first video ("Star wars Battlefront gameplay part 1") and see if i grew in the points above.

Anyway thanks in advanced!

Lars from the wicked Ones

Looked over the video and here is what i thought

Commentary: I think you did very well keeping the viewer entertained at times when needed, which is great especially for someone who's main language isn't English.

The Thumbnail: The thumbnail was quite bland for me and needs maybe a bit of color to maybe make it stand out from a crowd and gather attention towards the video itself.

The Contents Quality: Not much to say here really, quality was great especially with your commentating skills added along with the game play.

The Setup: I think the way you started and ended the video was great! But the thing i didn't likes is the Bulk in your description. I Think you need to shorten the description to not make the viewer yawn when reading it.


Overall I think the quality of your content is great and your walk through will become a hit


good luck in the future!

 

[TheWickedOnes]

Looked over the video and here is what i thought
Commentary: I think you did very well keeping the viewer entertained at times when needed, which is great especially for someone who's main language isn't English.
The Thumbnail: The thumbnail was quite bland for me and needs maybe a bit of color to maybe make it stand out from a crowd and gather attention towards the video itself.

The Contents Quality: Not much to say here really, quality was great especially with your commentating skills added along with the game play.

The Setup: I think the way you started and ended the video was great! But the thing i didn't likes is the Bulk in your description. I Think you need to shorten the description to not make the viewer yawn when reading it.


Overall I think the quality of your content is great and your walk through will become a hit


good luck in the future!

Thank you for the honest feedback! I will use your respond as a tool from now on, it's kinda nice to keep someone else's opinion and style. Also I guess there is going to change some things about the description Thanks panda!

 

[Angry Panda Gaming]

Thank you for the honest feedback! I will use your respond as a tool from now on, it's kinda nice to keep someone else's opinion and style. Also I guess there is going to change some things about the description Thanks panda!

Np, hope everything goes well for your walkthrough!