Here are my thoughts after 40 sec of watching
Intro kinda lame and you should be more thrilled. you sound like someone is making you do the video be more exited.
the good thing you have pretty good quality there.
Take into account the 5 second rule. Put a snippet of your most engaging and exciting moment before your intro then go into the video itself. Get a proper intro and make the video more exciting. Other than that great quality screen capture.