Entertainment Is content like this entertaining?

WhySoBasic

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Hello everyone, i havent post in this section to promote myself at all, and ive figured i might aswell try to get other people opinions, being that if i think its good, others might think other wise, so i want to know if content like this is atleast a bit funny or entertaining.

 

Anthony Smith

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is it entertaining? that's subjective. Here are some tips.

Lead with entertainment, not exposition (don't tell us that you want to do gaming videos and be a gaming channel... just be one.)

right off the bat 30 seconds in I'm wondering why I'm watching the video. maybe start with a funny moments montage or instead just cut out all the stuff that doesn't help tell a story. that's the verbalized pauses and any sentence that begins with "I" unless it's funny.

i'm sitting at about 3 minutes and I'm noticing this could be much more tightly edited and "punchier" I get the impression that you started your recording software and just let it run for 7 minutes then cleaned up your audio a bit. that's not exactly a bad thing but to keep an audiences attention you need to present them with more than just your stream of consciousness. Present the viewer wityh a tightly packed experience that leaves them liking the game, you, and craving more of both. That's when you know you've done your job.

I've got to go do a work thing now but overall this isn't bad. you as a person are entertaining but bringing up your editing game would help a lot so keep rocking!
 

KingHitman

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I think it's good, all it need is maybe some work but it's OK[DOUBLEPOST=1506202349][/DOUBLEPOST]btw we have similar channel name ahahhahaha
 
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